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If it's the Ballad of the Lonely Girl, (after reading it) shouldn't she still be alive?
Anyway, nice story. But it doesn't manage to be gripping, and it's too fast-paced, as you admit. Plus, there seems to be no plot stories other than just going straight for the bad guy and shooting him in the head.But if it's unfinished, my crictism might be void.
Hey, this reminds me of something I seem to remember you showing me before. Did you post this already?I found it a very interesting read albiet it was a little fast paced for me. It just means you have to concentrate more per line then you would in an average book, but hey don't listen to me it's a short story.