Soldat boy (a comic)

[dabura123]

Ive been looking around in the forums and i see lots of people making comics so ive started my own using simple sprites and its my first so dont flame.

Soldat Boy


i will post comic pages on the first post every time i update ill make a new post telling you what i did.

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[NinjaGimp369]

Uhmm.. What can I say? It's not exactly funny, if that was the intention.

Tthe drawings aren't too bad, but to be honest, this is just a complete copy of Soldat Interactive...

[Kagesha]

you draw like kyklis. Not bad of a comic. Wierd but pretty straight forward..It was alright..

[The Bone Collector]

Not exactly Gimp, totally different style. That would be like saying that SDFilm copied Zegovia for his style of drawings... (or whoever started comics first)...

[dabura123]

i use microsoft paint and i did get the idea from kyklis. but kagesha what u mean it was wierd.

im not really copying kyklises drawing style ive done a style like this for other purposes and also fan art.   

when im rushing my style is simple but i can do better art.

[Lord Frunkamunch]

The art's fine, but it's just not funny.

At all.

[a-4-year-old]

The art's fine, but it's just not funny.

At all.

probably because the story is so bad.

[dabura123]

does anyone have anything good to say?......its not ment to be funny its an action comic your not supposed to judge how funny it is just judge the story,graphics,ect......NOT HOW FUNNY

[Lord Frunkamunch]

Okay, the story's crap too. Happy?

If you want me to judge it as an action comic, add some action. Something more than 1 dead guy in 10 panels of cheesy dialogue.

I mean, it has potential, but as of now it's a bad rendition of a once-good concept.

[Carlitos]

The art's fine, but it's just not funny.

At all.

probably because the story is so bad.

Yup. Not funny, not cool. Again has Lord said, so many pages, always with the same images and some crappy dialogs.

[Decaying Soldat]

Hmmm, lots of negative comments. I wouldn't say it's good too. However, it's good that you put effort onto it.

A few suggestions:
1.Change the font. It's hard to read.
2.Like the others said, the pace should be tuned faster.

That's all I want to say.

[dabura123]

ok thanks at least decaying soldat gave a good review and im doing the part with more action now i chose the $$$$$$$$$ server and a better font.

[rithlore]

i had a try:

[The Bone Collector]

Babura, they are right in saying the story is crap. The key to any good comic is STORYLINE. It doesn't have to be funny (i.e The phantom, Spiderman, etc.) but it needs to be catchy. I love the drawing style, its great that you can draw comics... but now you need to think of a storyline to it.

Summing up:
Good Drawing
Bad Storyline

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[poopdogg]

sounds like SouljaBoy
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[.Long-Range]

That was a good time-waster =D