STORY PART 4!!!

[kniferknight95]

That night in the Ash area, inside my base I was just about to get off my shift. I noticed some screaming downstairs. It was the machine gunner. He was going upstairs and he fell and sprained his ankle. My spotter was sleeping, with a bandage around his shoulder. As I woke him up and told him it was his shift, I went to sleep

Nearly two hours later I woke up due to the fact that I heard screaming downstairs. I thought it was the gunner still. But when I heard a gunshot, I ran downstairs. There was an alpha inside of our base wearing our uniform. He was dead but he had everything with him. Grenades, knifes, handguns, and a riffle. I knew he was the one that shot my spotter. He had a very bad wound in his leg from me. I decided to head back to bed.

"GET UP!!! DAMMIT GET UP!!!!" thats what my spotter was yelling to me. I looked around, everybody was frozen with fear. Somebody had cut the power inside our base. All I could hear was chattering and... what nobody ever wants to hear in the dark... a chainsaw. There was a chainsaw revving and I heard the dozens of blades. When the chainsaw went off, I heard the medic screaming. With one last breath, I heard a shot. I lit up my lighter and saw his body. It was gruesome. I nearly vomited. I put my lighter away, and put my knife under my sniper riffle. Now it was a bayonet. When i went downstairs, thats when all hell broke loose. STAY TUNED FOR PART 5!!!! (sorry i just need a break...ill try to make a new story everyday.)

[Exodus]

make one topicz!

[Captain Ben]

so messed up

HAVE YOU EVEN READ WHAT YOU'VE WRITTEN

[Sir Jeremy]

Loved it like always   And don't listen to Ben

Next part coming soon I hope

[iDante]

make one topic and just update it every time. include the last parts (just ctrl-c them all)

[Hair|Trigger]

This is surprisingly amusing, reading your stories.  Dont push yourself, the best writers only write when they feel like it, they never stick to a schedule.  You dont need to do one every day.

Im looking forward to the downstairs battle in part 5 XD

What I think you should try is remove the un nessecary bits.  You mentioned an alpha guy spraining his ankle and screaming, no   as cool as it sounds it just drags the story out.  Try keeping it short and sweet.

Dont over-repeat your self.  all the screaming is getting old now  

Still, nice read

[Platehead]

Yep, very nice read now that you've paragraphed it.  Work on spelling, however, please.
And, no need to make a story every day.  Rather, write one in Microsoft Word or something, take a couple of days on it, refine it, etc, spellcheck it.  Then copy and paste the thing to a post, and it'll be heaps better.