Author Topic: Chimney Sweep Under The Moonlight (Read 6455 times)

Blue-ninja · « **on:** February 05, 2009, 04:40:43 pm »

It was stupid to light up my cigar at this time of the night.

I was the only one left and they all came for me. Every single one of them, and I'd mostly got rid of them save for that one experienced sniper. It was rather fortunate that it was dark enough so he couldn't see me very well. He hid among the rooftops, perhaps behind some slope as cover. Me, I chose hiding behind a chimney. What lay before me and my unseen enemy was my flattened brown stick.

I mutely checked and rechecked my own sniper rifle for any potential gun jams. Then I decided to empty out the magazine, which had only two shots left in it, and slid in a new one. All it made was a quiet clack. Digging out a pocket-sized mirror from my pocket, the mirror which I'd nicked earlier from a motel place that was blown apart. I wrapped a little of my own medical tape around the mirror and the stick, and then slowly moved the simple contraption out of the safe zone of the chimney, where I could see a reflection of the rooftops behind me. This plan proved to be less and less effective as more of the moon showed up from behind the clouds. Somewhere, out there, a crow called. I kept my eye on the reflections showing in the mirror, looking for something.

Then I got my answer. While I was looking at a slightly raised rooftop, something on top of the roof flashed. I heard the whoosh just before the mirror in my hand was ripped out. The mirror shattered, along with the stick, and some of the splinters lodged themselves into my hand. I drew my hand back, swearing. "Jesus motherfuck," looking at where the splinters lodged themselves, and seeing a little of the blood ooze out of the fresh wounds. "That bastard. Son of a bitchin' mother," words were just harsh whispers. At least I know where he is now.

I pulled the splinters out and wrapped some of the band-aid tape around it. I took off my hat, and put it on the muzzle end of the rifle. I stuck out the muzzle end on the opposite side of the chimney, from where the mirror broke. I heard a cough and saw the hat be torn in spots. After that, I let the rifle drop from my hands, and even stuck my arm out from behind the chimney as I let out a groan.

The sniper got up, believing he had finally eliminated his target. His body was cast against the brightening night sky as the moon revealed itself at last.

Suddenly, I got out from behind my brick barrier and pulled out my pistol, and shot the exposed sniper a few times. I saw his body jerk back a few times from the hits. One bullet lodged in his stomach, and the person keeled over. He fell off the roof, ricocheted off a balcony two stories down, and finally fell upon the ground with a sickening thud. I looked down at the body, my thoughts quieted by the sight.

I was brought back to reality by the sound of explosions in the distance, like thunder. I climbed down the side of the house, with my sniper gun slung over my back, and walked over to where the body lay.

We were trained differently.
We had different ideals.
We competed.

And yet...we shared the same blood.

He was my brother.

Ellimist · « **Reply #1 on:** February 05, 2009, 11:56:48 pm »

Wow,
nice story

Platehead · « **Reply #2 on:** February 12, 2009, 03:24:46 am »

Aw how sad

Nice story, was waiting when the next one would come

Keep it up

N. Escalona · « **Reply #3 on:** February 12, 2009, 03:59:33 am »

Sounds familiar, I may have heard this one before. Badass though.

ValiS · « **Reply #4 on:** February 12, 2009, 04:26:45 am »

Nice, but i'd like some soldat porn.

|_ancer · « **Reply #5 on:** February 13, 2009, 03:21:47 am »

Quote from: ValiS on February 12, 2009, 04:26:45 am

Nice, but i'd like some soldat porn.

Soldat porn= gay men naked?

Blue-ninja · « **Reply #6 on:** February 13, 2009, 04:01:00 am »

Quote from: ValiS on February 12, 2009, 04:26:45 am

Nice, but i'd like some soldat porn.

Looking at the tall shaft, seemingly to tower above him, he felt scared, cold, and good at the same time. Running his fingers down the shaft, it seemed the head of the tower gleamed in the light. He ran his hand down to the shaft's neighbors, fiddled around with the mechanism, and emanated a small moan when something clicked into place.
Then, slowly, slowly, he brought the tip of the glowing tower, seeming to pulse with energy, to his open lips. He managed to take the head, then a couple inches in until he couldn't take any more. His hand on the spud shooters, and his other hand traveling down, past the nuts and bolts, searching, searching.
Finding what he was looking for, he slipped a couple of fingers in and through the hole, and applied a downward force onto the trigger...

Lumen-Shroom · « **Reply #7 on:** February 14, 2009, 08:23:51 pm »

Quote from: Blue-ninja on February 13, 2009, 04:01:00 am

Quote from: ValiS on February 12, 2009, 04:26:45 am
Nice, but i'd like some soldat porn.

Looking at the tall shaft, seemingly to tower above him, he felt scared, cold, and good at the same time. Running his fingers down the shaft, it seemed the head of the tower gleamed in the light. He ran his hand down to the shaft's neighbors, fiddled around with the mechanism, and emanated a small moan when something clicked into place.
Then, slowly, slowly, he brought the tip of the glowing tower, seeming to pulse with energy, to his open lips. He managed to take the head, then a couple inches in until he couldn't take any more. His hand on the spud shooters, and his other hand traveling down, past the nuts and bolts, searching, searching.
Finding what he was looking for, he slipped a couple of fingers in and through the hole, and applied a downward force onto the trigger...

you're doing it wrong

Nice story, though.

Farah · « **Reply #8 on:** February 15, 2009, 10:02:30 am »

Quote from: Blue-ninja on February 13, 2009, 04:01:00 am

Quote from: ValiS on February 12, 2009, 04:26:45 am
Nice, but i'd like some soldat porn.

Looking at the tall shaft, seemingly to tower above him, he felt scared, cold, and good at the same time. Running his fingers down the shaft, it seemed the head of the tower gleamed in the light. He ran his hand down to the shaft's neighbors, fiddled around with the mechanism, and emanated a small moan when something clicked into place.
Then, slowly, slowly, he brought the tip of the glowing tower, seeming to pulse with energy, to his open lips. He managed to take the head, then a couple inches in until he couldn't take any more. His hand on the spud shooters, and his other hand traveling down, past the nuts and bolts, searching, searching.
Finding what he was looking for, he slipped a couple of fingers in and through the hole, and applied a downward force onto the trigger...

whos the fox

.Long-Range · « **Reply #9 on:** February 16, 2009, 11:05:35 am »

Inspired by "The Sniper" by Liam O'Flaherty?

Good story, nonetheless.

ValiS · « **Reply #10 on:** February 17, 2009, 12:29:28 pm »

Quote from: |_ancer on February 13, 2009, 03:21:47 am

Quote from: ValiS on February 12, 2009, 04:26:45 am
Nice, but i'd like some soldat porn.
Soldat porn= gay men naked?

No way, soldat is not gay, it just needs a female gostek. Modern army has women, for example my platoon was run by a 25-old woman when i was in the army. Soldat has to catch up with the times.

Soldat porn would have many themes, not just banal anal-yzing. For the kinky ones the intercourse could take place in the enemy base behind the boxes... Or you could have an affair between a red and a blue, and their teams reject them and then they /mercy together holding the flag it would be so beautiful just like romeo and juliet...

jrgp · « **Reply #11 on:** February 18, 2009, 02:35:00 am »

Quote from: .Long-Range on February 16, 2009, 11:05:35 am

Inspired by "The Sniper" by Liam O'Flaherty?

meh. yeah. I read that story last year in English and the first thing I thought when I read the, "he was my brother" was, what a rip!

Although I must say you worded it better in a more concise quickly to read way.

Blue-ninja · « **Reply #12 on:** February 19, 2009, 03:01:01 am »

Quote from: Farah on February 15, 2009, 10:02:30 am

Quote from: Blue-ninja on February 13, 2009, 04:01:00 am
Quote from: ValiS on February 12, 2009, 04:26:45 am
Nice, but i'd like some soldat porn.

Looking at the tall shaft, seemingly to tower above him, he felt scared, cold, and good at the same time. Running his fingers down the shaft, it seemed the head of the tower gleamed in the light. He ran his hand down to the shaft's neighbors, fiddled around with the mechanism, and emanated a small moan when something clicked into place.
Then, slowly, slowly, he brought the tip of the glowing tower, seeming to pulse with energy, to his open lips. He managed to take the head, then a couple inches in until he couldn't take any more. His hand on the spud shooters, and his other hand traveling down, past the nuts and bolts, searching, searching.
Finding what he was looking for, he slipped a couple of fingers in and through the hole, and applied a downward force onto the trigger...
whos the fox

no foxes were harmed in the making of this story

Shadow_Knight · « **Reply #13 on:** February 19, 2009, 08:31:53 am »

-.-' xD

great story dude.

tendulker · « **Reply #14 on:** February 19, 2009, 10:33:31 pm »

lol nice fake

http://tinyurl.com/b3ag4w

Yeah I actually had to read that earlier this year so I had suspicions by like the second line when I read the word sniper. Nice writing, though...

Platehead · « **Reply #15 on:** February 26, 2009, 05:12:52 am »

Hmm...
Still it's a well written story
And anyway, most of blue ninja's solo characters are snipers... I remember the guy getting his testes sawed off

demoniac93 · « **Reply #16 on:** March 17, 2009, 02:08:17 pm »

heh the sniper thing kinda rocked, but the gay-soldats thing made me lol so hard i woke my neighbors' baby downstairs

@the soldat woman gostek thing i say f12 that would rock...really...we need the other sex on this game! (battle of the sexes gamemode ;d)

~Niko~ · « **Reply #17 on:** March 17, 2009, 06:46:28 pm »

awesome xD which map was it?

Furai · « **Reply #18 on:** March 18, 2009, 08:04:46 am »

Quote from: ~Niko~ on March 17, 2009, 06:46:28 pm

awesome xD which map was it?

ctf_cs_italy I think. ;p

adam01526 · « **Reply #19 on:** March 21, 2009, 04:41:29 pm »

Quote from: |_ancer on February 13, 2009, 03:21:47 am

Quote from: ValiS on February 12, 2009, 04:26:45 am
Nice, but i'd like some soldat porn.
Soldat porn= gay men naked?

sick. ban or mute??

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Author Topic: Chimney Sweep Under The Moonlight (Read 6455 times)