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Offline Foxconn

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Rhymes II
« on: December 31, 2010, 04:50:32 pm »
NO TROLLING IN THIS THREAD.

This is what i done in some minutes. Some gangsta-ing

Im gonna extremely f**k up your life,
because i came to your house with a hunting knife.
I wake up only one time in the f**king year,
so im gonna rip off your heart, soul and ear.
Get ready for your death, you little whiny b***h.
Im gonna blast you if you will make an errant twitch.
That's f**king right! Cry some f**king more!
It wont help you! You just act like a wh***!
Here i am. The hope of many. Against the fur***ness.
Let's be against them! Let's begin the Madness!
With our pistols, rifles and shotguns, let's send them to Hell.
We will use all our sharp ammunition - Every bullet and Shell.
The cleansing has started. Enjoy the battle, boy!
Let's kill them and make them eat the f**king soil!

ANTIFURRIES! LET'S FIGHT AGAINST THE ENEMIES OF COMMON SENSE!

So many f**ks here...

...i hope i won't get banned for this.



FYI, more soon.
« Last Edit: December 31, 2010, 04:52:06 pm by Foxconn »
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Offline MattH

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Re: Rhymes II
« Reply #1 on: December 31, 2010, 05:05:33 pm »
It was a gay wast of your time.

Profanity doesn't make you tough.
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Offline Foxconn

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Re: Rhymes II
« Reply #2 on: December 31, 2010, 05:07:39 pm »
It's just rhyming.

I don't put any emotional stuff in my rhymes. I'm just playing with them.
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Re: Rhymes II
« Reply #3 on: December 31, 2010, 05:09:27 pm »
No, this is truly neutral. If words could kill..
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Offline L[0ne]R

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Re: Rhymes II
« Reply #4 on: December 31, 2010, 06:35:18 pm »
Ok, I'll assume you were actually serious when writing this, so here's serious critique, no trolling:

I hate to be rude, but this is really really bad. Why - because it's nothing but threats and swearing which "should" make you sound tough, cool, gangsta and so on, but the truth is that it sounds extremely lame and unoriginal.

If you like this kind of aggressive theme, then listen to some of the Linkin Park songs. Here's a good example:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FCIxz-A66Qg
(lyrics in the video description)



The definition of "cool" is NOT a mean face expression, shades, guns, violence, and lots of swearing. Being cool takes more than that. To be specific - it's being strong on the inside, not looking tough on the outside.
« Last Edit: December 31, 2010, 06:42:20 pm by L[0ne]R »
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Offline demoniac93

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Re: Rhymes II
« Reply #5 on: December 31, 2010, 06:47:37 pm »
Quote from: L[0ne]R on December 31, 2010, 06:35:18 pm
Ok, I'll assume you were actually serious when writing this, so here's serious critique, no trolling:

I hate to be rude, but this is really really bad. Why - because it's nothing but threats and swearing which "should" make you sound tough, cool, gangsta and so on, but the truth is that it sounds extremely lame and unoriginal.

If you like this kind of aggressive theme, then listen to some of the Linkin Park songs. Here's a good example:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FCIxz-A66Qg
(lyrics in the video description)



The definition of "cool" is NOT a mean face expression, shades, guns, violence, and lots of swearing. Being cool takes more than that. To be specific - it's being strong on the inside, not looking tough on the outside.

So basically, it's being Steven Segal.
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