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Offline ..::HHH::..

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My Story.. (poem again)
« on: January 05, 2007, 09:46:32 pm »
sorry for the misspelling and such..
what do you think?:p

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Re: My Story.. (poem again)
« Reply #1 on: January 05, 2007, 10:02:56 pm »
I am no master poet, but I liked it for the most part.

you should probably change the ending a bit though, because poems follow a pattern, for example, the first line rhymes with the third line in the beginning, and at the end, the first line rhymes with the second line. other then that, use spellcheck.
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Re: My Story.. (poem again)
« Reply #2 on: January 05, 2007, 10:37:26 pm »
To be blunt, I really dislike it.